This is a sentence I wrote on December 9, 2009 from an essay entitled “Metaphors”:
“When a computer is brand new, its memory space is empty except for a few major programs, and before I was cluttered, I had a single dedication and fast computing power towards school.” I like this sentence because not only is it long and detailed, it talks about how computers work then goes on to compare my life to how a computer works.
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This is a sentence I wrote on October 14, 2009 from an essay entitled “Privacy”:
“A person who lacks the ability to esteem someone’s privacy is a person who deserves all their confidential secrets to be publicly exhibited.” I like this sentence because it opens the entire essay with a strong exclamation and belief that instantaneously makes the reader want to continue examining the writing.
This is a sentence I wrote on January 19, 2010 from an essay entitled “Loyalty”:
“When it comes to my immediate family, loyalty coincides with respect.” I like this sentence because, unlike my other sentences, this sentence is short, but explains more than some of my longer sentences, and it has the vocabulary word “coincides” that fits with the writing and improves the style.
This is a sentence from an essay I wrote on March 5, 2010 from an essay entitled “Gentleman”:
“Mr. Ewell came so close to killing a little girl, but Boo, being the gallant, young gentleman he is, would not let any harm, any danger, or any peril fall upon a young lady.” I like this sentence because of the adjectives and the anaphora descriptively describing how a true gentleman should act.
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This is a sentence I wrote on December 3, 2009 from an essay entitled “Irony”:
“I wouldn’t even listen to the radio on the way to school, but instead, I would simply watch trees and cars fly by as I daydreamed about still being asleep in bed.” I like this sentence because of the way I use adjectives and imagery to put a picture in the reader’s head of what I do while I ride in cars.
This is a sentence I wrote on April 20, 2010 from an essay entitled “Family”:
“My dad has an unpredictable, unusual, and unorthodox motivation technique, but nonetheless, I praise his methods because they work.” I like this sentence because it uses parallelism, alliteration, a thesaurus word, and a transition, giving the sentence style, but the meaning of the sentence remains clear even with all the added special effects.
This is a sentence I wrote on March 10, 2010 from an essay entitled “Forgiveness”:
“People can be forgiven when they fear threats of harassment, forcing them to make the wrong decision, but when people like Bob Ewell want revenge on innocent men, there is no absolution.” I like this sentence mostly for the power of the second independent clause. After, the introductory clause, only four words simply but elegantly conclude the paragraph, and I like the way the very last word is a thesaurus word, adding extra emphasis to the clause.
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This is a sentence I wrote on May 17, 2010 from an essay entitled “This I Believe”:
“Its notes, its rhythms, and its chords change our perspective, our nations, and our souls.” The reason I like this sentence is because instead of parallelism with two adjectives, it’s parallelism with repetition, making the sentence unique and even more powerful.
This is a sentence I wrote on January 27, 2010 from an essay entitled “Ignorance”:
“Ignorance is one of the most selfish acts, turning people into rude, inconsiderate, disrespectful creatures.” I like this sentence because it starts out the entire essay with a strong statement that grabs the reader’s attention.
This is a sentence I wrote on November 18, 2009 from an essay entitled “Unwanted”:
“However, his parents, being hardcore Christians who hated anything impure, wanted him even less after his performance.” I like this sentence because it has an S-V split participle in it. I normally don’t use that special effect, so I like when I mix up my sentence enhancers because it gives my writing a variety.
“When a computer is brand new, its memory space is empty except for a few major programs, and before I was cluttered, I had a single dedication and fast computing power towards school.” I like this sentence because not only is it long and detailed, it talks about how computers work then goes on to compare my life to how a computer works.
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This is a sentence I wrote on October 14, 2009 from an essay entitled “Privacy”:
“A person who lacks the ability to esteem someone’s privacy is a person who deserves all their confidential secrets to be publicly exhibited.” I like this sentence because it opens the entire essay with a strong exclamation and belief that instantaneously makes the reader want to continue examining the writing.
This is a sentence I wrote on January 19, 2010 from an essay entitled “Loyalty”:
“When it comes to my immediate family, loyalty coincides with respect.” I like this sentence because, unlike my other sentences, this sentence is short, but explains more than some of my longer sentences, and it has the vocabulary word “coincides” that fits with the writing and improves the style.
This is a sentence from an essay I wrote on March 5, 2010 from an essay entitled “Gentleman”:
“Mr. Ewell came so close to killing a little girl, but Boo, being the gallant, young gentleman he is, would not let any harm, any danger, or any peril fall upon a young lady.” I like this sentence because of the adjectives and the anaphora descriptively describing how a true gentleman should act.
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This is a sentence I wrote on December 3, 2009 from an essay entitled “Irony”:
“I wouldn’t even listen to the radio on the way to school, but instead, I would simply watch trees and cars fly by as I daydreamed about still being asleep in bed.” I like this sentence because of the way I use adjectives and imagery to put a picture in the reader’s head of what I do while I ride in cars.
This is a sentence I wrote on April 20, 2010 from an essay entitled “Family”:
“My dad has an unpredictable, unusual, and unorthodox motivation technique, but nonetheless, I praise his methods because they work.” I like this sentence because it uses parallelism, alliteration, a thesaurus word, and a transition, giving the sentence style, but the meaning of the sentence remains clear even with all the added special effects.
This is a sentence I wrote on March 10, 2010 from an essay entitled “Forgiveness”:
“People can be forgiven when they fear threats of harassment, forcing them to make the wrong decision, but when people like Bob Ewell want revenge on innocent men, there is no absolution.” I like this sentence mostly for the power of the second independent clause. After, the introductory clause, only four words simply but elegantly conclude the paragraph, and I like the way the very last word is a thesaurus word, adding extra emphasis to the clause.
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This is a sentence I wrote on May 17, 2010 from an essay entitled “This I Believe”:
“Its notes, its rhythms, and its chords change our perspective, our nations, and our souls.” The reason I like this sentence is because instead of parallelism with two adjectives, it’s parallelism with repetition, making the sentence unique and even more powerful.
This is a sentence I wrote on January 27, 2010 from an essay entitled “Ignorance”:
“Ignorance is one of the most selfish acts, turning people into rude, inconsiderate, disrespectful creatures.” I like this sentence because it starts out the entire essay with a strong statement that grabs the reader’s attention.
This is a sentence I wrote on November 18, 2009 from an essay entitled “Unwanted”:
“However, his parents, being hardcore Christians who hated anything impure, wanted him even less after his performance.” I like this sentence because it has an S-V split participle in it. I normally don’t use that special effect, so I like when I mix up my sentence enhancers because it gives my writing a variety.
