Wednesday, September 30, 2009

Cal's "Comp'ny" Essay

SECOND DRAFT

Austin Rosenberg

English 8

Mr. Salsich

October 6, 2009



Company

Respecting company, whether or not you like it



(TS) Having company over is one of the most significant events that affects your reputation. (CM) Not only will how you treat your company affect the impression you make on them, but will extend into a larger community. (CM) If you treat your company well, it will give a positive impression on them as well as the people they talk to. However, if you leave an inadequate impression, your guests won’t want to come over again nor will any other people that have been informed of the poor hospitality demonstrated. (CS) The impression made on your company is essential, so if you have a situation where you don’t like the company you are hosting, like Scout from To Kill a Mockingbird, every effort towards politeness and respect should be attempted.

(TS) Calpurnia is a character in To Kill a Mockingbird who strongly believes you should treat the people in your house as welcomed guests. (SD) Welcomed guests are people in your home you should engage in a polite manner, which Calpurnia told Scout she failed to do when Walter visited. (CM) Calpurnia noticed that Scout got angry at everything Walter did at the dinner table, and she contradicted what he said frequently in an impolite way. (CM) Not only would she contradict what Walter was saying, Scout would yell at him since he was acting in a way that she thought was inappropriate behavior. (SD) This situation also presents a need for more respectful behavior toward her company. (CM) Scout would yell at Walter to not put so much syrup on his food because the food they were eating had enough flavor without so much syrup on it. (CM) If Scout had been respectful in this situation, she would have accepted the fact that that is how her company liked to eat food rather than yelling at Walter to stop using so much syrup. (CS) Being a respectful and polite host is good because it gives you a fine reputation, and if you ever want to have your guests as company again, they will gladly accept the invitation.

(TS) I can recognize how Scout has trouble being a good host because I also have difficulty acting like a good host when my company is exasperating me. (SD) My cousins are the ones I least look forward to having as company, but I try not to express my frustration with them. (CM) My parents are very strict with my siblings and I when it comes to proper etiquette, but my cousins like to wear chains and swastika designs at the dinner table as well as speak like unsophisticated gutter mouths. (CM) However, as irritating as they can be, I like to take a polite approach and do not point out their rudeness. (SD) While my parents and adult relatives converse, I am responsible for hosting my cousins, which is an irksome task. (CM) When they play with toys or take out controllers to play video games, they leave their mess to move on to another organized area they can jumble around leaving me to clean up and reorganize the muddle of objects. (CM) Their poor behavior is another problem for me. Since I am their host, I get in trouble for their cursing or roughhousing, which causes chaos when they start to break pictures or ornaments around the house. (CS) Like Scout, I have my own difficulties when it comes to being respectful to company, but I still try hard to make them feel welcome so I don’t hurt any of their feelings.

(TS) Presenting hospitality to your guests is an easy, stylish way to promote your reputation with the visitors you host and everyone the visitors talk to. (CM) When all of your previous visitor’s friends hear of how well you treat your company, they will want to come over your house to experience the welcome gestures you display. (CM) Who knows? Out of all the people you meet from being a kind host, you may make some new friends. (CS) Scout is a good example of how not to treat your company because even if the feelings are less than friendly between you and your company, your guests should still be treated with civility, or as you would want to be treated if you were in their shoes.

3 comments:

  1. Austin-
    I liked how you said "unsophisticated gutter mouths" instead of rude or impolite in your first paragraph.
    In your first paragraph, I would change the 2nd CM or the 2nd SD because you use guest twice in those two sentences.
    Also, just make sure you don't repeat words too often
    ...Otherwise your two paragraphs are interesting and well written!

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  2. Austin-
    I really like your 1st paragraph's concluding sentence because its long and well written. However, in your first paragraph and in your first SD's 1st CM, you say "...and she contradicted what he was said frequently in an impolite way." I'm a little confused about this sentence. Maybe if you take away the "was" Also, in your 2nd paragraph, your first SD is about your relationship with your cousins, but the commentaries are about your siblings.
    Good Job Austin!

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  3. Austin,
    I really enjoyed reading your paragraphs! I think your second paragraph is very good and it tells a very good story. I also really like your second paragraph. However, I agree with Adam that your commentary on your first supporting detail, "(CM) Scout got angry at everything her guest did at the dinner table, and she contradicted what he was said frequently in an impolite way," does not make sense. Also as Carrie said you repeat a few words, like guests for instance. Austing good job! If you fix these few things this will be a wonderful essay!

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