Assessment Paragraph

Austin
English 8
Mr. Salsich
November 6, 2009

(TS) I’ve noticed that my essays have become more carefully written, but I know there is always room for improvement. (SD) At the beginning of the year, my work was sloppy. (CM) Every night I was assigned to write a paragraph, I would spend about twenty minutes writing then post it on the blog without proofreading it. (CM) I learned that doing this wasn’t the best strategy if I wanted to earn an ‘A’ on an essay. (SD) Another factor I have improved is the unity of my essays. (CM) My essays used to be lost without a single path to follow because most of my sentences didn’t tie together. (CM) Now my writing is constructed under an umbrella, and the reader understands the point I make throughout my essay, my paragraphs, and my chunks. (SD) Even with these improvements in my writing, my essays still have flaws. (CM) My biggest flaw that remains is when I put too many words into a sentence. (CM) When I have too many words, the reader notices it, and they stumble over my sentence because it doesn’t read well. (CS) From the beginning of the year to now, my writing has improved significantly, and I hope that by the end of the year, all the flaws I still have to work on will no longer exist in my writing.